Topic 11: Online Writing

~ tigerspirit67

Write: For this week's writing exercise, you need to imagine that you are writing for a website that is aimed at persuading the public to donate to a charity or not-for profit organisation. Your contribution will consist of a short piece of writing to be positioned under the tab: "Donations".

  • Choose a charity or not-for-profit organisation that relies to some extent on public donations. This may be an international organisation such as World Vision or the International Red Cross, a national organisation such as the RSPCA or Cancer research, or a local organisation such as a community radio station or amateur theatre company.
  • Your purpose is to persuade your audience to donate money.
  • As far as possible, identify your audience and make the content suit the purpose and audience.
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ROAR Animal Rescue is a not for profit agency that relies solely on your donations.  With your help, we are able to help cats and dogs in need get appropriate veterinary care.  Thanks to past donations, we have managed to care for many sick and injured pets and rehomed them at an affordable rate for low income families and pensioners.

Although adoption fees reimburse some of our costs, they often only cover the basic vet care needs such as desexing, microchipping and vaccinations.  Donations however, help us to get medications and blood tests for our very sick cats and dogs so that we know exactly what health issues they have.  By donating to ROAR Animal rescue, you will help save countless lives and also help us to find more homes for the animals as soon as their health is restored.  The next time you consider donating to a charity or not for profit agency, please consider donating to ROAR Animal Rescue and save a life today.

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Read: Once you have listened to the lecture, visit a few websites – a corporate website or a blog, for example. Note the style of writing employed in each of these. Are these written in the style described in the lecture? Write a brief critique of the websites you visit in your journal and share your examples on the discussion board.

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For my reading exercise, I chose a friend's blog:

Not bad for a fat chick!

5:04 AM |

So, I went to the Gym. They got me in at the time I would normally go in, so I knew how many people would be around. I had a good look, signed up and organised a personal training session for the next morning. (Mostly so she could write me a program and show me the equipment)

Then I decided to have a go on the equipment. Well, I knew how to work the treadmill. So I had a go on that. Then jumped on a bike, and I couldn't even turn the stupid thing on. So I gave up and went home!

Next day, I went back and meet my personal trainer. Then went through some equipment with me. I did ok. My upper body is weak! The most I could lift was 26kgs. But, that's a good thing. It's something to work on! Then she took me to the leg press machine. She told me that she could leg press 100kgs. Then I tried, and she kept upping the weight (as they do) till I could find it a bit tougher. 91kgs! Woohoo. Not bad for someone who had only ever seen that machine on TV.

So I have a few new aims. Improve my upper body strength. And to out leg press my personal trainer in 3 months. 🙂

Oh and apparently, that bike was dodgy and they have been having a lot of trouble with it.

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My critique. (apologies to my friend Bronwyn for this, hope I don't offend)

There are some basic typos here, and she switches around from present to past tense which makes the read slightly confusing.  But she includes her emotions which draws in the reader so that it feels like just two friends chatting.

A lot of casual 'talk' used and not proper English… words like 'got', 'so'.

The sentences are fragmented but because she's written it as she would have spoken it, it's still legible.

With the friendly banter included in brackets, you could also hear the tone of her voice as if she was telling you the story in person.

All in all, despite the non professional written piece, it still good enough for light entertainment.

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